Thursday, June 10, 2010

Orphan

To people who are new to 55 Fiction. It is a genre of fiction writing using only 55 words. A story with only 55 words in it.

Here is my third offering in this genre titled 'Orphan'


Lying naked on the bed she looked at him, they had kissed, fondled; he had forced love onto her. She never smiled nor was she shy. Happiness had travelled miles from her. Orphaned she lay beside him.

There was a knock on the door; she knew there stood another lover waiting to buy her.

8 comments:

Guria said...

Good to read you after so long!
This 55-er is vivid and hitting... Nice! :)

Neha said...

nice one Harsha..

Siddhesh 'Ravan' Kabe said...

oh wow... nice one...

Roshmi Sinha said...

Nicely done...

P.S. Welcome back!

karan a said...

Very powerful post! Good writing... I liked your blog :)

Shri Ram Ayyangar said...

I was just wondering what this fiction 55 is, you have explained.Thanks.

Crazy And Drunk said...

It conveys your point with clarity, gives us something to think about and is almost poetic in nature, but could do with just a little more subtlety.

(Sorry about the voluntary critique, it's almost like a reflex.)

teempee said...

this is great. such short but clear story. it's good to read, too. the 55 words thing is cool.