Monday, November 2, 2009

Eternal - 55 Fiction

This my first attempt at writing 55 Fiction. According to me it is the toughest to write, and after writing this one my opinion has just gotten stronger.
To people who are new to 55 Fiction.
It is a form of fiction writing, a story with only 55 words in it.

Here is my first 55 Fiction titled 'Eternal'


Lying on his chest she felt peaceful. He always had unconditional love for her. Importantly he had time for her. There were moments they sat lost in each others eyes. She never mentioned it, but he meant world to her.

Relatives entered room to console her.

Little did they know she had left with him.

17 comments:

frozenwell said...

oh nice....sweet...

Nethra said...

Very nice. Write some more.

divsi said...

super duper kewl man! Awesum first attempt:) fab punch in d end:) keep it up harsha.. If anyone wants to kno how a first attempt shd be I l pass on this link:)

oRange* said...

woah, good one

Shahid Mukadam said...

The best of stories is there, right at the next corner...this is one of those...great story bro

Shahid

BK Chowla said...

It unbelievable that this is your first attempt.It is superb and very touching.

pra said...

A really good first 55 fiction!

Harsha Chittar said...

@frozenwell: Welcome to the blog. Thank you very much for reading the post, hope you keep visiting. :)
@Netra: Thank you, yes i will try to write more :)
divsi: Thank you for your kind words, please do keep visiting
orange: Welcome to the blog. Thank you very much for reading the post, hope you keep visiting. :)

Harsha Chittar said...

@shahid: Welcome to the blog. Thank you for your kind words, hope you keep visiting. :)
@bk chowla: Welcome to the blog, you made my day with your comment. Hope you keep visiting.
@pra: Thank you very much. Glad to see you here :)

Shankar said...

hi..harsha.. yeah its very tough to write actually... even i experienced the same when i wrote my first 55... but yours first attempt is really a good one dude... very good one.....

Hiyaa said...

Brilliant!
Thanks for leaving the comment on my story...Got lots of good inputs from you that are useful for improvement. These are actually two attempts of a bigger piece of jigsaw I am trying to write eventually which will require me to do a lot of research.
The first part of the story is abot 95% authentic and the second one has about 20% reality attached to it.
Thanks though, I really found your inputs useful. Appreciate the time you took to go through it.
Cheers
Hiyaa

pulkits said...

entertainment in a bite!

grace said...

Wonderful thought Harsha!
Waiting for more...

MADHU RAO | (INDImag.COM) said...

On of the few 55F I happen to like. It says a lot and so well at that.

Reminded me of the movie "Notebook"..

grace said...

Hey Harsha! I have a little something for you on my blog.
Do drop in to check it out.

dilontherocks said...

ohh..Thats so touching.....Well written for a first timer...:)

Shas said...

Very touching.